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Discussion in 'Chit Chat' started by dancingqueen79, Jun 27, 2008.

  1. dancingqueen79

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    I'm writing a novel and I need someone's critique, does this sound like a good story...it's a gay vampire story...

    a family escapes from a small town in order to escape a clan of evil vampies and wolves, fourteen years later the boy returns to find out the reason as to why his family escaped and when he finds the real reason he finds his life in danger. The gay part is he falls in love with a boy vampire!!!!!
     
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    yay .. how old are the vampire??? kids
    sounds interesting
     
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    Make is sadistic and gruesome. Don't give it a happy ending.
     
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    yes make it a happy ending , ending wih lots of cookies and bl00d
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    The vampires was born in 1894 and died in 1908 sao phisically he's fourteen but he's really 113. The ending is that the boy is tricked by an evil vampires into thinking his parents are in danger, so he retrurns home where he is attacked, (thrown against a mirror, stangled, and in the end bitten) the vampire sucks the venom out of him. I am working on the sequel...it is kinda a happy ending
     
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    Does this sound like a good title for it
    "Blood and Lust"?
     
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    i think it sounds good. i would read it.
    i read the Twilight series and thought it would better if it was a Gay relationship ^_^

    keep it happy because as much as i tend to make fun of them non-happy upsets me more. is there way to read the current one you have? i love stories! ^_^ lol
     
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    wow sounds like an awesome one to read!!!!