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dancingqueen79 · 27th Jun 2008, 03:42 PM

I'm writing a novel and I need someone's critique, does this sound like a good story...it's a gay vampire story...

a family escapes from a small town in order to escape a clan of evil vampies and wolves, fourteen years later the boy returns to find out the reason as to why his family escaped and when he finds the real reason he finds his life in danger. The gay part is he falls in love with a boy vampire!!!!!

Steve · 27th Jun 2008, 03:58 PM

yay .. how old are the vampire??? kids
sounds interesting

Uncertain · 27th Jun 2008, 03:58 PM

Make is sadistic and gruesome. Don't give it a happy ending.

Steve · 27th Jun 2008, 04:01 PM

yes make it a happy ending , ending wih lots of cookies and bl00d
^
_

dancingqueen79 · 27th Jun 2008, 04:07 PM

The vampires was born in 1894 and died in 1908 sao phisically he's fourteen but he's really 113. The ending is that the boy is tricked by an evil vampires into thinking his parents are in danger, so he retrurns home where he is attacked, (thrown against a mirror, stangled, and in the end bitten) the vampire sucks the venom out of him. I am working on the sequel...it is kinda a happy ending

dancingqueen79 · 27th Jun 2008, 04:13 PM

Does this sound like a good title for it
"Blood and Lust"?

Davey · 27th Jun 2008, 06:32 PM

i think it sounds good. i would read it.
i read the Twilight series and thought it would better if it was a Gay relationship ^_^

keep it happy because as much as i tend to make fun of them non-happy upsets me more. is there way to read the current one you have? i love stories! ^_^ lol

Nj doodle · 27th Jun 2008, 07:29 PM

wow sounds like an awesome one to read!!!!

27th Jun 2008, 03:42 PM	#1
dancingqueen79 Banned Gender: Male Orientation: GAY AND LOVING IT! Out Status: Some people Location: California Age: 18 Posts: 76 Join Date: May 2008	I need someone's opinion I'm writing a novel and I need someone's critique, does this sound like a good story...it's a gay vampire story... a family escapes from a small town in order to escape a clan of evil vampies and wolves, fourteen years later the boy returns to find out the reason as to why his family escaped and when he finds the real reason he finds his life in danger. The gay part is he falls in love with a boy vampire!!!!!

27th Jun 2008, 03:58 PM	#2
Steve EC's Soldier! Full Member Gender: Male Orientation: Sargeant sexual Out Status: whoever asks Location: Born in australia, but now living some where else Age: 21 Posts: 2,273 Join Date: May 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion yay .. how old are the vampire??? kids sounds interesting __________________ Soldier " there is no room for that in my pocklet" commander " if there is room in your heart then there in your pocket" Soldier " i cant fit my gf in there" -r " have you tried ? until you try you dont know"

27th Jun 2008, 03:58 PM	#3
Uncertain Member Regular Member Gender: Male Orientation: Gay Out Status: All but family Location: LOL Age: 20 Posts: 34 Join Date: Jun 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion Make is sadistic and gruesome. Don't give it a happy ending.

27th Jun 2008, 04:01 PM	#4
Steve EC's Soldier! Full Member Gender: Male Orientation: Sargeant sexual Out Status: whoever asks Location: Born in australia, but now living some where else Age: 21 Posts: 2,273 Join Date: May 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion yes make it a happy ending , ending wih lots of cookies and bl00d ^ _ __________________ Soldier " there is no room for that in my pocklet" commander " if there is room in your heart then there in your pocket" Soldier " i cant fit my gf in there" -r " have you tried ? until you try you dont know"

27th Jun 2008, 04:07 PM	#5
dancingqueen79 Banned Gender: Male Orientation: GAY AND LOVING IT! Out Status: Some people Location: California Age: 18 Posts: 76 Join Date: May 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion The vampires was born in 1894 and died in 1908 sao phisically he's fourteen but he's really 113. The ending is that the boy is tricked by an evil vampires into thinking his parents are in danger, so he retrurns home where he is attacked, (thrown against a mirror, stangled, and in the end bitten) the vampire sucks the venom out of him. I am working on the sequel...it is kinda a happy ending

27th Jun 2008, 04:13 PM	#6
dancingqueen79 Banned Gender: Male Orientation: GAY AND LOVING IT! Out Status: Some people Location: California Age: 18 Posts: 76 Join Date: May 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion Does this sound like a good title for it "Blood and Lust"?

27th Jun 2008, 06:32 PM	#7
Davey Here Then There! Full Member Gender: Male Orientation: Gay Out Status: Out to everyone Location: Upper Sandusky, Ohio Age: 21 Posts: 954 Join Date: Aug 2007	Re: I need someone's opinion i think it sounds good. i would read it. i read the Twilight series and thought it would better if it was a Gay relationship ^_^ keep it happy because as much as i tend to make fun of them non-happy upsets me more. is there way to read the current one you have? i love stories! ^_^ lol __________________ I've found true love. Davey+Bryan November 17, 2008

27th Jun 2008, 07:29 PM	#8
Nj doodle Member Regular Member Gender: Male Orientation: Gay Out Status: Everyone but the rents Location: Melbourne Posts: 27 Join Date: Jun 2008	Re: I need someone's opinion wow sounds like an awesome one to read!!!!

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