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Something I wrote...

Discussion in 'Chit Chat' started by Malchik89, Jun 30, 2008.

  1. Malchik89

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    I wrote this just a minute ago, thought id share it, see what you guys think. It's called Toy

    I’m a wind up toy
    Just wind me up and ill do your bidding
    Ill entertain, ill talk, ill laugh, even sing
    Until you get bored of me, and my gears slow down
    I’m left alone in the dark, cold and afraid
    Waiting to be wound up and happy again
    3 days later I’m noticed once more
    Finally, I get to be happy over again
    You wind me up, I dance and sing
    Thought my voice hits a glitch, and a note is off key
    This makes you mad; I’m of no further use
    So you throw me away, until it’s the next time to play
    My winder has broken off, I’m no longer complete
    You can see all inside me
    No heart that breaks
    No soul that can be crushed
    Just a bunch of gears winding
    For the next time I give you everything
    And you just discard me once more.
     
  2. Paralyzer

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    That's kinda creepy. Like... that's not helping my past hoarding instinct..
    I'm over it but still, .. haha.. you're funny.

    HAHA, sorry, that was off topic

    That was actually fun to read. I liked it.
     
  3. MeskElil

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    Nice. Very...thoughtful. I never really thought of it that way. I like it.
     
  4. Andrew

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    Love it :slight_smile: Thats is pretty creative!
     
  5. GunStarre

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    That's so sad. Trying to achieve perfection sucks.
    Imperfection is much better :slight_smile:
     
  6. GlindaRose

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    That was sad. And also a very interesting perception.

    I liked it. :slight_smile:
     
  7. Chris

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    It had good points!!! Kinda sad though...i guess that gave it fffllavvaa!!!!

    IT WAS EXCELLENT!!! Keep writing!!!