I wrote this poem over 20 years ago. It was written about a man I used to see most days he lived locally. One day I saw him at the side of the road, his car had broken down. I was a mechanic so helped him back on the road. This was the start of a wonderful 18 months before he died of cancer. I still think of him often and this poem is for you Ron x THE HIM Incredible as it may seem I knew I'd meet you in a dream the way you looked the way you spoke The car you drove, your dog Musical you had to be I felt that deep within And from the moment that I saw you I knew that you were him The him I was not looking for but looking all the same I knew so much about him But I didn't know his name I knew that he'd be older And steadier than me And I had no doubt in my mind That he'd be good for me We met and then the Him was you Fate lent a hand the looking's through You said that you weren't looking But you were looking just to see And the HIm that you weren't looking for Just happened to be me. I will submit other poems I have written and hope others will join me
I can't compliment your technicality, but its simplicity sort of helps its sweetness in a way. It is very beautiful and the flow endearing. He may still be with you in some form, overjoyed to see that your feelings still pour out for him.
Technicality never came into it , it's just how I felt inside and how it ended up on paper. I will add another written when I was just 17 and in love with a married man with 2 kids. He wanted to leave his family for me but I convinced him (even though I loved him ) that his family needed him more if only you could understand the fix I'm in This overwhelming love for you I have within This love that life has blighted from the start This poem is to say what's in my heart It seems that life is perfect when you're here And when you leave anguish tears my very soul apart I dream of you at night time whilst in bed of all the silly wonderous things you've done and said others would condemn this love as wrong All that will do is make my love for you more strong Not even on the day that life is drained from me Will I forget the things that you have done for me You are the harbour in which I shelter from the storm The sturdy rock upon the shifting sands As you so firmly grasp my trembling hand. I'm not overly educated although I did finish High school. These are simply pourings from my heart that I share with you
I don't mean to insult, just trying to give honest review as if I were the one submitting and looking for feedback. Doesn't mean it's bad at all; I actually like it a lot.
Hi , I didn't think you were insulting me at all. I just wanted to explain why they were as they were. I understand they are not that complex but complexity doesn't always equal good or interesting to read . in fact it often means bloody boring lol. I thank you for your reviews