A Song I Wrote

Nice has a chill relaxing vibe...keep it up...im a blunt person too when it comes to music

 

I like it! Its sounds like something i'd hear on the radio. The only thing i'd tell you to work on is... Sometimes your voice gets a little lost in the instruments

 

May have been my headphones, but the words are slightly drowned out by the music. If that was the intention, I apologize. Other than that, I liked it. Of course, I'd want to be able to better hear the lyrics, LOL.

You do all of this, by yourself?

 

Sounds really good!

Agree about the vocals needing to be just a little louder. But still, impressive.

 

This is really excellent! Did you play the instruments yourself or use a program?
Either way, it's really impressive.

 

That's so cool you have a great talent my friend! Do you plan on doing this professionally as a career? I'd buy your albums

 

I'm sure you'll succeed with talent like this. I'd love to hear more

 

Every bit as good as commercial pop, and infinitely better than I could do. Very good I do have some criticisms purely for improvement though:

1. The first introduction of the guitar goes on one or two measures too long. I expected the vocals to come in a little sooner.

2. Your voice sounds quite over-edited. I like the ethereal feel that you got with the echo/blend effects, but I'd scale it back a teeny bit. The others have said your voice is hard to hear with the instruments, and in addition, it could be clearer, volume notwithstanding. And with what I'd consider a "small" song (few instruments for a sense of intimacy) your voice needs to be the center of attention. This guy will be 100% more folksy with his song but he was one of the greatest songwriters ever and could captivate a room with nothing but a guitar.

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3. The song has a very solid sound to it. But it needs a little more. A bridge or some other sort of variation to the same progression throughout. Maybe it's my snobbishness, but when I hear a really good part early in the song, I like to expect that that is only the warmup to more awesomeness, not the extent of it. The best example that comes to mind is Journey's "Don't Stop Believin'". Even as the frontman finishes one or two verses, the song still comes out with a short solo that builds on his already electrifying singing. Afterwards he changes his style a little so from beginning to end, the song never rests on its laurels.

I don't mean to be over-harsh seeing as I compared you to a world famous superstar band, but if you can make a song like the posted one already, you might get to that level in no time.

 

It's on.

 

I like it soo much. It can use some polish of course but in current state your voice, music and probably equipment give song a mystic/creepy vibe which is keep firing images in my mind.

So in my book this song is good.

 

Wow! You certainly do have talent!! It was very good!

And, you are only 14, I hope you'll continue doing these things! You have a very interesting voice with a nice timbre, keep it up!! :icon_bigg

 

I consider that seriously impressive for a 14 years old.

Then again, you youngsters have the talent to do things so much better than us old geezers.

It's not perfect (See other posters for constructive criticsm), but better than anything I could do, and I'd much rather listen to it than to what is usually played on the generic radio stations.

 

it's nice... it's got a "the xx" kind of vibe.
and like others have said... it's hard to understand the lyrics at times :|

but, yeah, you've got potencial!! don't give up, girl ^-^

 

Cool song...Where can I download it?

 

This is awesome! And I really like that other song on your soundcloud as well Definitely getting a hail to the thief vibe here. Love those unexpected major-to-minor changes in the melody

 

I like the dreamy-like vocals... reminds me of Slowdive or summat - which is defo a good thing. No way are you 14?! Impressive!