Not sure where to put this so I decided here was best. I was messing around with a tool called word mover. Its basically fridge poetry. I came up with this. Any ideas to make it better? Is it trash? Feel free to be honest. (Obligatory note I am not in any danger to myself at the moment) two boys caught beaten cast out rock bottom silence So yea. Haven't slept in few days (thanks insomnia and depression) so rambling :smilewave
I like it. The only thing I would really change is putting "cast out" on it's own line instead of on the same line with "beaten". Running those two things together really broke the flow in my head. Having a break in between it would fit more with the rest of the poem, since the rest of it is divided with natural breaks between words/phrases.
