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am i allowed to post a poem here?

Discussion in 'Entertainment and Technology' started by mattyrusso, Sep 7, 2008.

  1. mattyrusso

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    well imma do it anyways. lol

    the sweetest of pain.

    the sun will always shine for you
    burning just to perfect your pigmentation
    every inch of you is sacred space
    the very air you breathe
    i regard with the highest level of respect
    and try to keep my words in a single flow
    no stumbling out
    though it doesnt work,
    no one can quite blame me.
    the sun will always shine for you
    a little more lighting for those baby blues
    im drowning in
    those bones set up perfection in the most human of ways
    and an irrational thought
    to think i was almost the same.
    eyes open wide
    jaw dropped in surprise
    sweet pearly whites shining like the stars
    your eyes tear through me
    as your ellipses still worry me
    they see right through the mask i craft
    made of procrastinated time
    tied with lace of tangled lies
    your eyes followed me here
    your eyes drove me here, back to this place
    this beautiful hole, this winter place
    i am in love with this isolation
    only slightly less than im in with you.
    what sweet madness would seek to blame me
    that i shouldnt be so in love with such a name
    deny your heroism,
    you just keep building
    as your beauty tears me down
    down into the ground, back into the hole
    to that lonely winter place
    that i love like i could never explain
    becuase loving you harbors the sweetest of pain.

    ever hear of a dude named corey johnson? add me, him, and an inferiority complex and u have this. enjoy, comment.
    peaceee.
     
  2. Derek the Wolf

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    "It's easier to get forgiveness than permission."
    Poem is okay. I prefer something a little more structured though.
     
  3. Leigh

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    i quite like it :slight_smile:

    i generally prefer things a bit shorter, and rhymey lol. but yeah... not bad!
     
  4. mattyrusso

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    thank you guys =]