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Need you guys' opinion on something....

Discussion in 'Entertainment and Technology' started by 3n, Jun 27, 2016.

  1. 3n

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    I'm a songwriter. I love making rock music, but as per usual with most of my interests; I always doubt myself. I keep putting myself down. Everything I write I think is rubbish, stereotypical, uninventive, and extremely cliche. Even If my friends say its good or whatever. I started working on a song, mainly focusing on a homophobic friend (whom I no long speak to) and past bullying. I "finished" the lyrics (The marks due to that I'll probably trash it or I'll hate something about it), and want your opinion on it. The reason why I've decided to post it online, is because I know you don't know me. You won't be biased to give a perfect rating or anything (I believe everyone's just humoring me and that I'm a joke).
    Sorry If it sucks, and sorry If it reminds you of past memories of bullying and/or hate.
    sorry

    "Why Am I The Enemy"

    (Verse)
    Hello my dear
    old friend

    I thought we'd
    be buddies to the very end

    But next thing
    you know you turn on me

    Like the bridge
    burning in the flames

    Hammering the last nail
    in the coffin

    You say its
    no big deal

    But I'm still
    asking

    (Chorus)

    Why am I
    the enemy

    and Why are you
    the bully

    I ever so feared
    all these years

    So Why do you
    hate me

    for something that
    was simply fate

    Why am I
    the enemy

    Why do you
    hate me

    (Verse)

    All you see
    is the shadow

    of someone you
    used to know

    I'm no longer
    a human

    Simply a thing
    to arson

    with your slurs
    and punches

    Just a blank slate
    to lace with bruises

    Clay to mold
    to your whim

    (Chorus)

    Why am I
    the enemy

    and Why are you
    the bigot

    That calls
    me an it

    I am depised
    by the hypocrite

    I used to call
    a friend

    Why am I
    the enemy

    Why Do you
    despise me

    (Bridge)

    I'm sick of it
    I'm sick of the hate

    I'm sick of being
    told I'm a mistake

    I'm sick of being
    labeled a freak

    I'm sick of being
    scared to speak

    I'm sick of being scared
    to call for help

    I'm sick of being
    told to kill my self

    I'm sick of being
    wierd

    I'm sick of
    living in fear

    I'm sick of the
    biased therapy

    I'm sick of the
    bigoted remedies

    I'M SICK OF
    EVERYTHING

    (Verse)

    I still hear the echoes
    of your rampage

    The panic and terror
    in its wake

    I still feel the
    aches of the blows

    And the pain and dread
    you wouldn't know

    I still remember the
    anxious wait

    of every day wondering
    what you would say

    now it's time to
    flip the table

    Cause I'm done today

    (End)

    Sorry If it sucked, and thanks anyway
     
  2. idcidc

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    Honestly it looks awesome but man..rock music isn't about asking other people what they think,its about you and the emotion and effort you put in making music. The bullying can fuel your inspiration and through the lyrics you transfer these vibes to others. I think the lyrics are good and you should continue doing what you want.