Twas twenty days and twenty nights before the reality overcame the fright The solace in my mind, the truth in the lines The danger of our kind, the resentment of design So I refuse to deny and repent for my so called sin and I will refuse to hide what lies under the skin It needs more lyrics and is a heavy metal song. What do you guys think
First thing: using the word Twas is really weird unless it's in a christmas song. Overall it's not bad, although it's hard for me to judge a song without knowing the melody.
i agree ^^ if you changed "Twas" to Since it might sound better. I love metal, I'm excited to hear how this turns out! Have you given any thought as to the next few lines? I'd love to hear more. Also, from what I've read so far, Yoy might get some inspiration from listening to bands like Otep and August Burns Red. \w/
