So in order to get some feelings out I wrote a poem. I feel like poetry maybe be a good outlet to get old feelings out. Its a little too rhymy, but tell me what you think. MY PAIN MY PAIN GOES DEEP FROM THE TOP OF MY HEAD ALL THE WAY DOWN TO MY FEET BEING GAY DROVE ME TO DEPRESSION KEEPING EVERYTHING BOTTLED UP INSIDE LIVING IN SUPPRESSION MY HEART ACHED FROM ALL THE SELF HATE CRYING OUT TO GOD ASKING WHY IS THIS MY FATE FEELING ALL ALONE AS IF I HAD NOWHERE TO BELONG A CONNECTION TO OTHERS MY HEART DID SO LONG FEAR OF BEING OUTED CAUSED ME MUCH ANXIETY BEING GAY IS NOT THE NORM ACCORDING TO SOCIETY THE DAY FINALLY CAME I TOLD MY FAMILY I HAD SOMETHING TO SAY TEARS FILLED MY EYES AS I TOLD THEM I WAS GAY THE DAYS FOLLOWING DIDN'T FEEL SO REAL RECEIVING LOTS OF SUPPORT MY LIFE BEGAN TO HEAL TO GET TO A RAINBOW YOU HAVE TO FIRST GO THROUGH THE RAIN SO THIS IS MY STORY THIS IS ME THIS IS MY PAIN
WOW!!! I'm impressed I love it you clearly have talent so you need to keep writing! I would suggest maybe if you get really into it to perform you poems in a theatrical sense sounds like you got some good solid messages that people need to hear and see!
I think its great and sorta goes through different stages. I like the "go through the rain" part and writing in general, no matter what form, is a great way to express feelings. You did a great job
It's really good . May I ask why it's all in Caps though? To be honest, I thought the poem was yelling at me :lol:, but other than that, it's beautiful. The only thing that I would criticize is the last line; it didn't flow too well. Keep up the great work (*hug*)!
I enjoyed the rain part. A bit of line structure variance might help, perhaps more abrupt thoughts such as the first line -- I've always liked chaotically structured things with subtle patterns
Poems about pain are a very trodden road, but I like it. You paid good attention to the meter, which is something not a lot of casual poets do. I can't say I like the all caps or lack of punctuation, but it's very good overall.
I think it is very good! I only write Haikus, because I love their fromat, so reading your poem was very different, in a good way. Sitting in my room Faint glow of electronics I approve your post Gosh I love Haikus.
